Wednesday 22 July 2020

Skydiving

One morning i woke up and my mom said that i have to go to school today but l said no because i hate school and it is dumb no is is cool do you rember that time when you did that dance for the cook island now we are going to some were is till mum you see.

 

When we got there


Mum are we going sky diving yes we are and geus where we are going to we are going to cookisland hey comda yes mam are you our skydiving manager yes i am okay you're weird no i'm not yes you are okay then. Can you please put on a backpack okay sir then go on that wind thing and just jump on it okay okay then sir what are you doing i'm not coming far mum you bated breath smells. Sup my name is agent carter hi,hey so are you my skydiving leader that depends  


When we went on the plane 


Dam this so loud it is like a shattered leaf good idiom kid your gonna need it for what mum im joining the skydiving business okay then join now if you want jump now okay lets role


6 comments:

  1. Great job Kymani, next time try to add some speech marks, I like how you used paragraphs

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  2. i really like your story but next time use headings

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  3. Good job Kymani probably next time try to use more speech marks and prove spell your writting.

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  4. I really liked the way you used idioms, But maybe next time you could check to see if your story makes sense

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  5. I have achevid my goal

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  6. my next goal is to a more punctuation

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